When Smile and Tears Meet

[rowens]

The question of "intermingle/explode" and "you and I" after intermingle.

"You and I" are the subject of "intermingle," so they are necessary. I think that answer might also satisfy the issue Rowens brought up with "explode," but I wasn't sure if I saw what he was referring to.

I had taken a 2nd look at that "intermingle" there before when I originally wrote it, but I have since realized that it is not an infinitive, but the 1st person plural form of the verb with "you and I" being the subject.

It works, if you approach it that way. The lack of punctuation after "shower" can lead you to read on to the next line without pausing in thought though you pause in reading.

But if you look back at the poem, and see that there are few commas and only one period, and go with the theme of flowing together, you can get what it's saying. The most important thing is that the person reading it pauses long enough at the end of the line to see the next line as it should be. Some people will, some won't. So you can leave it as it is, or put a comma or a colon or something like that. Whatever feels right.