Delivery

[wrighti]

Deliver me from myself
Keep my place with you
Hold my heart with tenderness
And keep it just for you

Don’t you darken my fears
Or push my hope away
Let the light shine on me
And strengthen resolve today

I worry that I’m not enough
Not enough for you
Deliver me from myself
Keep my place with you

*critique welcome, please be kind Does it make sense?

[corawrites]

While you've got a good rhythm going, for S1, I suggest not rhyming "you" with "you"
Additionally, I think that it wouldn't hurt to add a few more stanzas. I feel like you could strengthen this with more description (but try to keep away from cliches!).
In my opinion, a little embellishment would turn this into a really solid piece of work.

[wrighti]

Thanks for your feedback, will take it on board and see how I go. Cheers!