02-11-2011, 05:16 PM
Sunset
Is a
Dying
Sunrise.
I
Remember
Your
Love.
Night
Promises
Oblivion.
Lie. Lie. Lie.
Is a
Dying
Sunrise.
I
Remember
Your
Love.
Night
Promises
Oblivion.
Lie. Lie. Lie.
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"Brain' foxtrot."
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02-11-2011, 05:23 PM
i like the interaction and the denial going on
in the poem ris. i also like the metaphor of sunrise for love the form works well. it's till structured into separate sentences. thanks for the read. 
02-14-2011, 05:48 PM
"sunset is a dying sunrise" is just perfect... I love how you turned the romantic image on it's head. I love how the very structure of the poem suggests dissolution. Thumbs up
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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