Fauxku Choo Choo (the play's the thing)
Succulents crest
in nova bloom
blest God's way

Yemenese flowers
bloom in the sand -
God loves US bombs
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Yemenese flowers
bloom in the sand -
God loves US bombs


Yemen's cure:
Footprints
in the Sand.
there's always a better reason to love
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Yemen's cure:
Footprints
in the Sand.

US is cleaning up Yemen,
sand, footprints, and all.
God approves women and children first.
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    US is cleaning up Yemen,
    sand, footprints, and all.
    God approves women and children first.  
   
    my footprints
    smaller now -
    summer sand

                                                                                                                i used to know a lotta stuff, but i still have eight cats
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Footprints smaller now - 
summer sand

Falling rain
Wipe this slate clean


Edit: Assuming it was the length and not the theme.
The Chronicles of Lethargia
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(05-26-2017, 01:55 PM)Radetof.Yahska Wrote:  My footprints
smaller now - 
summer sand

Falling rain
Wipe this slate clean

Good poem... though I must note it doesn't follow this thread's guidelines.
Fauxku Choo Choo guidelines:
1. Any TINY poem of 1 to 4 lines (or a 5 line limerick) - does not have to be haiku-like.
2. Poem includes 2 significant words from the preceding one.
       (Tense and plurality may be changed -- homonyms, other inventive wordplay, is winked at.)
3. Poem reflects some aspect of the previous poem (encouraged but not obligatory).

also:
4. Copy last poem and repeat it above your poem in your own post.
5. It's OK to play with yourself. (Post replies to you own poem.)
6. If the previous poem doesn't fit the guidelines:
       Either mention this politely, or continue on as if nothing happened,
       or use the poem before it, or strike off on your own. (See guideline 3 above.)
7. It's OK to add TINY extraneous (or not) notes.
                                                                                                                i used to know a lotta stuff, but i still have eight cats
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Good poem...though I must note
it doesn't follow
this thread's guidelines.

Don't mind Ray ~
he doesn't follow
any thread's guidelines.

Just kidding. Fear the Death Ray.
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Don't mind Ray ~
he doesn't follow
any thread's guidelines. 

Follow Ray's guidelines, pigs!
Especially the one legitimizing
public self-diddling.
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(05-26-2017, 03:28 PM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
(05-26-2017, 03:18 PM)Lizzie Wrote:  Good poem...though I must note
it doesn't follow
this thread's guidelines.

Don't mind Ray ~
he doesn't follow
any thread's guidelines.

Just kidding. Fear the Death Ray.

     RAY is the Great God of Fauxky Chew Chew and the Sacred Keeper of the Rules   --   He can bend them to His will at will.

                All lesser beings must adhere to them or suffer the fate of joyful ignorance.



(05-26-2017, 01:55 PM)Radetof.Yahska Wrote:  Footprints smaller now - 
summer sand

Falling rain
Wipe this slate clean


Edit: Assuming it was the length and not the theme.

Your length was not the problem, grasshopper, it was your failure to obey guideline 2:

2. Poem includes 2 significant words from the preceding one.
      (Tense and plurality may be changed -- homonyms, other inventive wordplay, is winked at.)


        While I'm sincerely sorry, you must now Suffer the fate of Joyful Ignorance!


Length not a problem
Grasshopper

Piddling on the porch
Little wee-wee

O joyful ignorance
The Chronicles of Lethargia
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(05-26-2017, 03:50 PM)Radetof.Yahska Wrote:  Length not a problem
Grasshopper

Piddling on the porch
Little wee-wee

O joyful ignorance

Making progress... you've got guideline #2 down, but you've ignored guideline #1:

        1. Any TINY poem of 1 to 4 lines (or a 5 line limerick) - does not have to be haiku-like.

Gods these days... nobody pays them any attention.  Sad
                                                                                                                i used to know a lotta stuff, but i still have eight cats
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(05-26-2017, 04:01 PM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
(05-26-2017, 03:50 PM)Radetof.Yahska Wrote:  Length not a problem
Grasshopper

Piddling on the porch
Little wee-wee

O joyful ignorance

Making progress... you've got guideline #2 down, but you've ignored guideline #1:

        1. Any TINY poem of 1 to 4 lines (or a 5 line limerick) - does not have to be haiku-like.

Gods these days... nobody pays them any attention.  Sad

5 line limerick
Distracted hoi polloi
Dead gods

Dime a dozen
The Chronicles of Lethargia
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(05-26-2017, 04:06 PM)Radetof.Yahska Wrote:  ...
5 line limerick
...

    That wasn't a limerick, grasshopper.
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My footprints
smaller now -
summer sand


it must be summer -
there are footprints and sand
in my sandwich
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it must be summer -
there are footprints and sand
in my sandwich

summer streams babble
drowning out choo choo
fauxku sand-rake
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    summer streams babble
    drowning out choo choo
    fauxku sand-rake
   

    sand-raking
    my zen garden -
    litter box
   
                                                                                                                i used to know a lotta stuff, but i still have eight cats
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sand-raking
my zen garden -
litter box


sand spread on ice -
zen and the art of
shadow-boxing
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    sand spread on ice -
    zen and the art of
    shadow-boxing
   

    ice? shadow?
    vaporize
    in the heat of our white-hot love
   
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ice? shadow?
vaporize
in the heat of our white-hot love


white-hot ice ~
shadowed love
vaporized
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    white-hot ice ~
    shadowed love
    vaporized


    love
    shadowed
    stalking my heart

                                                                                                                i used to know a lotta stuff, but i still have eight cats
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love
shadowed
stalking my heart


shadows
at the heart of love ~
dead stalks
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