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Crooked, lumpy limbs
on eventide canvas;
The silhouetted Beech
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(05-11-2013, 06:26 AM)Volaticus Wrote:  
Crooked, lumpy limbs
on eventide canvas;
The silhouetted Beech

Another good one Volaticus, especially the last line which I most definitely wasn't expecting. A tree? not a person, I had to do a double take just to make sure, very good. And 'silhouette' is another one of those words like 'turquoise' that not only looks beautiful but is beautiful to say. You are becoming quite proficient with these very quickly, I'm impressed.
Excellent.
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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(05-11-2013, 09:30 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  
(05-11-2013, 06:26 AM)Volaticus Wrote:  
Crooked, lumpy limbs
on eventide canvas;
The silhouetted Beech

Another good one Volaticus, especially the last line which I most definitely wasn't expecting. A tree? not a person, I had to do a double take just to make sure, very good. And 'silhouette' is another one of those words like 'turquoise' that not only looks beautiful but is beautiful to say. You are becoming quite proficient with these very quickly, I'm impressed.
Excellent.

Must agree with Volaticus, this is a lovely image. Fine writing.
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(05-11-2013, 09:30 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  
(05-11-2013, 06:26 AM)Volaticus Wrote:  
Crooked, lumpy limbs
on eventide canvas;
The silhouetted Beech

Another good one Volaticus, especially the last line which I most definitely wasn't expecting. A tree? not a person, I had to do a double take just to make sure, very good. And 'silhouette' is another one of those words like 'turquoise' that not only looks beautiful but is beautiful to say. You are becoming quite proficient with these very quickly, I'm impressed.
Excellent.

I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it. And I like that you say that the last line was unexpected. I hadn't looked at it that way actually, so it's good to be enlightened.
I also love the word silhouette. It just radiates beauty.
And also, I can't express how much it means to me, to have a talented poet, saying such kind and encouraging things. I thank you deeply.
LB
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