The Navigator

[Miles Vertuoso]

I like the introspection and the progression of your thought. There are a few grammatical errors, where punctuation and spelling would bring this together a little more. This line: "When my ship seemed so yare" seems awkward and using such a little known word, kind of lost the point for me. Perhaps consider revising this line to match the tone of the rest of the piece. Overall, I liked the imagery of the ship that was carried consistently throughout.

Thanks for the feedback, I'll have a look at that third stanza in particular.