Kill Those That Came Before
#1
Kill all those that came before,
kill all your influences,
all those bastards,
literal and figurative bastards,
that ever had a say, or took a course of action
that influenced you in any way.

Did they seem clever,
and moreover, right,
at the time you read them?
Did their distant, careful opinions and suggestions
seem valuable advice when preparing to write your first
book, poem; marry your first wife; or travel
to your first foreign country?
Were the people just as misunderstanding,
or understanding,
as they were for the dead writers
with their dead ideas from bygone eras?

Their ideas are dead.
Did you not hear them quoted in a sitcom
or one of the songs they wrote played in a commercial,
aired during a sitcom,
advertising something that you dread
and something that other people have now forced you to own?

Well, you think,
it's not their fault, if they're dead...
But it is their fault if their work is dead
enough
to fit into our age, and motivate others,
with all their former, alive power,
to rage and laugh and sing and dance
in the glory of all that makes and keeps
so many of us dead.

They are dead,
their work is dead.
And it's not your fault,
or their corpses',
and it's certainly not mine.

They are dead
and yet they live,
in your heart, in your mind, in your thoughts,
in your ideas,
in the ideas of your peers,
in the ideas of your teachers,
in your work.

It's not your work,
but theirs.
The dead that are alive,
the zombies, more alive than you.
That now being dead, are still more alive than you.

Kill all those that came before,
so you can be one of the few whose work is alive
while you're alive.
Don't wait till you're dead for them to have to deal
with you,
struggle with you, listen to you, understand you, and pay you,
and love you.

Kill your influences,
so that the words read at your funeral
have more a chance of being yours;
and not someone else's.
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#2
I think the message here is very simple; which can either be a good or bad thing. Generally, I think it'll be very effective though.

Not sure if I agree with the statements in the poem though, example; "They are dead, their work is dead.", because a unique characteristic of humanity is our ability to pass on knowledge and understanding, mimicry has been used to escalate many great thinkers and artist.

When I disagree with a poem's message, which is a common part of reading poetry, I hope to savor in the choice of words, rhythm of phrases, or unique perspectives. Unfortunately I did not find these much in this one.

Being you are a trained poet in verse and method, It was enjoyable to read.
Thanks for sharing.
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#3
I think that the last stanza really made a good impact as an ending. I enjoyed the catty (I hope that's the right word) tone of the poem throughout. Sorry I don't have more to say, but I enjoyed the read Smile
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#4
(05-01-2013, 09:07 AM)rowens Wrote:  Kill all those that came before,
kill all your influences,
all those bastards,
literal and figurative bastards,
that ever had a say, or took a course of action
that influenced you in any way.

Did they seem clever,
and moreover, right,
at the time you read them?
Did their distant, careful opinions and suggestions
seem valuable advice when preparing to write your first
book, poem; marry your first wife; or travel
to your first foreign country?
Were the people just as misunderstanding,
or understanding,
as they were for the dead writers
with their dead ideas from bygone eras?

Their ideas are dead.
Did you not hear them quoted in a sitcom
or one of the songs they wrote played in a commercial,
aired during a sitcom,
advertising something that you dread
and something that other people have now forced you to own?

Well, you think,
it's not their fault, if they're dead...
But it is their fault if their work is dead
enough
to fit into our age, and motivate others,
with all their former, alive power,
to rage and laugh and sing and dance
in the glory of all that makes and keeps
so many of us dead.

They are dead,
their work is dead.
And it's not your fault,
or their corpses',
and it's certainly not mine.

They are dead
and yet they live,
in your heart, in your mind, in your thoughts,
in your ideas,
in the ideas of your peers,
in the ideas of your teachers,
in your work.

It's not your work,
but theirs.
The dead that are alive,
the zombies, more alive than you.
That now being dead, are still more alive than you.

Kill all those that came before,
so you can be one of the few whose work is alive
while you're alive.
Don't wait till you're dead for them to have to deal
with you,
struggle with you, listen to you, understand you, and pay you,
and love you.

Kill your influences,
so that the words read at your funeral
have more a chance of being yours;
and not someone else's.

Not bad, there seems to be some passion being expressed and the sentiment is noble. Anaphora seemed to work well. Good stuff for us beginners. This poem seems very American in its freedom. However, Old poems can still enrich a person. Some things are timeless. Good thought provoking piece for us newbies to read.
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#5
I liked it. I like how you implore them to be original and overall the flow made it a nice read. Thank you for sharing this one!
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#6
i liked it and thought the message was far from simple but very primitive. the rant style was excellent. the narrative in parts is weakened in places because of how it tells of everything being dead without giving the reader any reason or depth.
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#7
Saying "their work is dead" seems to contradict the main point that they live on through their work.
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#8
If it had reason and depth, it would die of its own stench. As it is, its stench only nurtures it.
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#9
I found this one interesting. Even more after reading some comments and then reading it again with new eyes. I perceived the 'Theys, and Theirs' to represent generally all other people, but very specific certain people at other times. Made me think about my experience and feel like the words were coming out of my head, kind of like POV poetry. Someone mentioned the ranting kind of style and the fact that it felt primitive but not simple, also. I feel that way about how my actual head works, so maybe that's why I got into this piece a lot.
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#10
You can only be right if that's how you felt when you read it. That I felt that way when I wrote it is incidental.
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