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Shoe's
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03-01-2013, 07:01 PM
rich mans shoe's
Only one pair made middle class shoe's shinney and new working class shoe's worn for all occasions dead people shoe's waiting in a charity shop. 
03-01-2013, 08:07 PM
(03-01-2013, 07:01 PM)escorial Wrote: rich mans shoe's As stalker said, why the apostrophes? But as stalker doesn't say....I will. This is a very, very good concept. Some spelling issues, check before posting; some punctuation problems...actually, more problems than punctuation  ; but nonetheless, all forgiven because it is a great idea.Best, tectak 
03-01-2013, 10:55 PM
(03-01-2013, 07:01 PM)escorial Wrote: rich mans shoe's apostrophe is unusual. 'finnegans wake' reference maybe? samuel beckett: 'By the brothers Boot...'? 'Shinney' Gaelic play on words? 'dead people shoe's', off the radar... eventually realised these were mistakes. are they? either you are being too clever for me (which isn't hard) or you have made some typos. however, the concept is amusing, if not a bit trite. 
03-03-2013, 11:42 PM
(03-01-2013, 07:01 PM)escorial Wrote: rich mans shoe's I really like this poem. The concept is good, and I'm wondering if it could be built upon a little more. As it stands, it's an enjoyable and quick read, but it doesn't really leave much impact. It may be me selfishly asking for too much, but I just really dig the concept. Thanks for the read! =)
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