Cleaning up: (bit of content)

[billy]

Sweat around my groin is thick white
the cheese under my fingernail stinks.
Pleasant
like the black bits from between my toes
after a hike up Ben Nevis.
I always sniff before bathing,
It has to be done;
as does the way I fart
under the cover
of darkness and duvet,
sniggering at protestations.
In the bath
I reach round to spray my crack,
let the skin get wet at the top of the groove
so i can roll away the dry dead flakes.
While I'm washing my head
the tattoo of water from the resting shower
gives me a stonker of an erection.
I don't masturbate in the dirty water,
the smeg turns into little spunk balls
and sticks to the hair on my legs.

[John Holland]

Perhaps that was a little more information than I needed! LoL! Your imagery is great in this... if a little confronting. Satire of the hairy leg type? Thanks for the read. I enjoyed it immensely.

[billy]

some are meant to live in the gutter
thanks John.

[Ca ne fait rien]

But where is the small furry anmal, preferably some kind of rodent, Billy? I looked for the small animal everywhere. Perhaps it was down the plughole waiting for the delicacies that washed down like manna from heaven to feed its young.
I liked your end- line words. End- line words are very important and should always be selected with the finesse of tweezing nasal and ear hair. Yours are impactful and I liked the way you rhymed bathing with Ben Nevis. I also liked the subtle way you did not say that you cleared the ear wax by licking it off the finger that dug it out, leaving the reader to imagine the cocktail under the finger nails.
Thanks for makng me smile (and grab the Japanese Spa fragrant Radox) .

[billy]

bugger i missed the ear wax , i had a scrub before breakfast
thank you for the smile

[abu nuwas]

TMI

[Philatone]

not my topic of choice i'll admit. but that's the reason why I read, if that makes sense. some thoughts

Sweat around my groin is thick white ..starts with a hammer, gotta say
the cheese under my fingernail stinks.
Pleasant
like the black bits from between my toes..I really like the "bits". I think it's better to keep it up to the imagination
after a hike up Ben Nevis.I kind of thought the idea was already done. I mean, I can see why this is here, but it also does not strike me as crucial information.
I always sniff before bathing,
It has to be done; ..now, I don't know why this has to be done. will say that I do like the tone of resignation
as does the way I fart
under the cover
of darkness and duvet,
sniggering at protestations.
In the bath
I reach round to spray my crack,
let the skin get wet at the top of the groove
so i can roll away the dry dead flakes...debated to to whether or not you need "dry" and "dead" when describing "flakes". might be too redundant
While I'm washing my head
the tattoo of water from the resting shower
gives me a stonker of an erection.
I don't masturbate in the dirty water,
the smeg turns into little spunk balls
and sticks to the hair on my legs.

I don't know, but this feels unfinished to me. did not expect it to stop where it did, which makes me wonder about the message. just my thoughts

[billy]

as always, thanks for the feedback. i can use most of what you mention when i do an edit
i'll see if i can do a better closing for it as well.