Or a Short One

[dukealien]

Or a Short One

cement sunned May-hot:
slug slimes down sidewalk center,
a Long March ahead

[Semicircle]

Hello Duke,

The title connecting with the last line was pretty clever.

I'm not sure what the purpose of capitalizing long march is though. Is it necessary?

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It was raining this morning as I walked to school.

Woops, I stepped on one

The vibrations say
it's time to surface and mate:
sidewalk worm orgy

[Mark A Becker]

Hello duke-
some in-line comments:

Or a Short One

cement sunned May-hot: 'cement sunned' is tricky to say, but I get it
slug slimes down sidewalk center, 'sidewalk center' much easier to say aloud
a Long March ahead Is there some significance to 'Long March' ? Feels like I must be missing something.

Of course, those slug trails usually are 'a short one', and burnt into the sidewalk

[dukealien]

Ah, well, glad the images got across.  As for the rest, visualize this:  big slug wanders around in the rough for years, so this Long March becomes part of its vocabulary.  But after a while, it conceives the idea to make a change of course and get to the rich green lawn on the other side of the sidewalk.  So up it climbs, and soon the promise is in sight... but instead of continuing across, it swerves as only a slug can swerve (left or right, doesn't matter) and proceeds down the middle of the sidewalk, progressively losing substance but unwilling to complete the change it began with such high hope.

Something like that.