Papaver rhoeas

[TranquillityBase]

Papaver rhoeas

Her flowers bloom:
the poppies
luminous red flesh
deny winter’s bones.

Papaver rhoeas

Her flowers bloom:
the poppy’s
illuminated red flesh
denies winter’s bones.

[dukealien]

Papaver rhoeas

Her flowers bloom:
the poppy’s
illuminated red flesh
denies winter’s bones.

This is well done (i'm holding Flanders and Afghan poppies at arm's length to avoid harshing its optimistic spirit).

I do catch myself subconsciously hunting for a word in place of "illuminated."  Luminous?  Supernaturally, for the syllable count?  I get the picture - brightness on account of purity, a high spring Sun, and background of bony white snow-leavings.  Just a thought for a place to look when editing if desired.  Newborn baby's red face?

[brynmawr1]

Papaver rhoeas

Her flowers bloom:
the poppy’s
illuminated red flesh
denies winter’s bones.

Hi TqB,
I agree, this is well done.  I do like Duke's 'luminous'.  Fits the rhythm of the last two lines.  'Her' makes me realize I need to research the title!
This is good.
Bryn

[brynmawr1]

Papaver rhoeas

Her flowers bloom:
the poppy’s
illuminated red flesh
denies winter’s bones.

Hi TqB,
I agree, this is well done.  I do like Duke's 'luminous'.  Fits the rhythm of the last two lines.  And maybe denying rather than denies.  'Her' makes me realize I need to research the title!
This is good.
Bryn

[TranquillityBase]

Thanks Duke and Bryn.  I agree about "luminous".

The title was simply a way not to give away the subject of the poem too soon.