Stuck in a Phonebooth

[addy]

Deluge distorts the world
into fuzzy Auerbachs slipping
past endless static, past
the mirage of
an empty me
white
and disappearing

[billy]

i presume the auerbach in the poem is the frank auerback
whose paintings are blurred around the outlines due to the deep brush strokes? ( i hope so lol)
i like the endless static' line.and the end works well. nicely done addy
thanks for the read.

[Leanne]

Found this stuck at the back of the forum... gosh this is pretty. My only suggestion would be to remove "the mirage of" as I think the poem is stronger without that qualification.

[newsclippings]

whoa, surprised this dudnt have more comments

[Leanne]

it's from the dim dark ages, when there weren't a lot of people here... but addy's stuff is always worth a read

[billy]

whoa, surprised this dudnt have more comments

addy helps out with the workings of the site and wrote this when we were a lot smaller. she doesn't get on much and she's not really into poetry. she was basically helping out by putting a bum on a seat
shame really cos she writes very well.

[Leanne]

She does indeed. Addy, I know you're busy but we really miss you! (Billy, give her a bit of a kick up the bum... and a hug)