A Glimpse of My Parents

[danny_]

revised (thanks Todd)
A Glimpse of My Parents

Mom says to dad
"Hey dear, Mike called about
something and something or another."

"I don't know nothin' 'bout nothin' or another."

[Todd]

It's easy to visualize these parents, Danny. They might also be most sets of grandparents I've seen.

I realize it's not a critique forum but I think the poem works just fine without L2.

You could restructure

L1
L3
L4

(Strophe break)
L5

Best,

Todd

[danny_]

Thanks Todd, I probably got a little carried away posting something silly like this. Just thought it was so funny when I heard it, I had to write it down. Was a long time ago but still makes me laugh to this day. Good points on restructure. I always appreciate critique You sure have a good eye for these things. I know a lot of you do here. Makes this place awesome.