The never of always

[Expressthefeelin]

The never of always

I was never 13 in his eyes

I was always to old
I was never naïve

I was always welcoming

I was never strong enough
I was always smart enough

I was never a victim
I was always the one hurt

I was never decisive

I was always happy
I was never at peace

I was always scared

I am forever
The never of my always

[Erthona]

Hello, welcome to the site. I found the title initially confusing, then I saw it was redundant. You might want to look at reducing the redundancies of "I was never", and "I was always". I'm not sure if this is about the writer, but maybe it is too close (that's how it seems) to do anything other than hint. Maybe the writer should try something that is not so personal, or difficult to write about.

Best,

Dale

[MT-EMPTY]

Or maybe you should just open up even though it might seems akward to post, if Erthona is right about he's assumption. Sometimes you wanna withhold information that you think will lessen the amount of readers who understand or like it, when it's really it's often the oppisite that is the case. Or you could write something else first, giving something a little more personal and gain the comfort for opening up, or make something less personal also. I do find some parts confusing or just very unclear. I don't know what "i was not strong enough, i was allways smart enough" means. Parts like the start "I was never 13 in his eyes.... I was allways to old" i get the meaning of (or at least think i do) but most else seems strange to me. It's hard to wrap your mind around the sentence "the never of allways" i think

[LorettaYoung]

I understand the "never of always"; an existential statement; but do not see it in the poem; the structure feels interrupting; I feel you have something to say here and you should work on it. Best, Loretta