entropy
His big scared eye stares vacantly:
________pink, dumb,
and offensive as a broken clock.
Shocked, I toss him.
He tumbles, stares, thump-thumps,
____digs at the carpet.
A teary scotch weeps across my belly, crotchless, red, numb, hot.
My brother baits me, "One?" and slumps his way into the kitchen for a beer.
We don't have any.
I want a wolf to cover us in blood.
Rip their heads off. Eat the patient doctors, fling the stocks, the shots, the muzzles, scatter pharmacies like Jesus, get drunk,
and toast that fucking rabbit.
But, on the other hand, there's entropy . . .
I
was trimming the hedge at noon today when I saw
the slim end of a tail slide over broken
holly leaves, drifting slowly, poorly camouflaged.
It was Christmas, and I thought, it's cold out. Snakes should all be under rocks,
________ hidden.
And I wondered what had woke him and scared him from his hole?
And I wondered . . .
___Can a snake get cold?___Can a snake feel lost?
My father saw it and took a hoe and chopped
its neck. Or maybe it was some other snake. They all look the same. He tried to
________ toss
it by the tail, phip phip phip phip, across the way,
____but it got caught
____in a tree,
____where it hangs.
I’m raking leaves when my brother finally pulls in. He looks a lot the same, but I know he's not.
And my father grins and hugs him around the neck,
and a cop turns around in the cul-de-sec,
and it seems like no one finds this place except on accident.
I take off my gloves, and in no time flat, the heat goes out of them, and I sit down behind
________ a pile of leaves
and pretend I’m somewhere else,
where the rabbit whelps gets snicked, and the snake gets sleep, and whatever it is still means something.
--I would've just as soon bounced this off trueenigma before putting it up here, but that felt like it'd be poor form . . . I'm saying that because this is a pretty drastic revision, and a quick "nope" might be all I need if I'm way into the weeds.
--I posted this in serious and didn't hear back, and I'm thinking that might be because it belongs here, in misc. Maybe?
His big scared eye stares vacantly:
________pink, dumb,
and offensive as a broken clock.
Shocked, I toss him.
He tumbles, stares, thump-thumps,
____digs at the carpet.
A teary scotch weeps across my belly, crotchless, red, numb, hot.
My brother baits me, "One?" and slumps his way into the kitchen for a beer.
We don't have any.
I want a wolf to cover us in blood.
Rip their heads off. Eat the patient doctors, fling the stocks, the shots, the muzzles, scatter pharmacies like Jesus, get drunk,
and toast that fucking rabbit.
But, on the other hand, there's entropy . . .
I
was trimming the hedge at noon today when I saw
the slim end of a tail slide over broken
holly leaves, drifting slowly, poorly camouflaged.
It was Christmas, and I thought, it's cold out. Snakes should all be under rocks,
________ hidden.
And I wondered what had woke him and scared him from his hole?
And I wondered . . .
___Can a snake get cold?___Can a snake feel lost?
My father saw it and took a hoe and chopped
its neck. Or maybe it was some other snake. They all look the same. He tried to
________ toss
it by the tail, phip phip phip phip, across the way,
____but it got caught
____in a tree,
____where it hangs.
I’m raking leaves when my brother finally pulls in. He looks a lot the same, but I know he's not.
And my father grins and hugs him around the neck,
and a cop turns around in the cul-de-sec,
and it seems like no one finds this place except on accident.
I take off my gloves, and in no time flat, the heat goes out of them, and I sit down behind
________ a pile of leaves
and pretend I’m somewhere else,
where the rabbit whelps gets snicked, and the snake gets sleep, and whatever it is still means something.
--I would've just as soon bounced this off trueenigma before putting it up here, but that felt like it'd be poor form . . . I'm saying that because this is a pretty drastic revision, and a quick "nope" might be all I need if I'm way into the weeds.
--I posted this in serious and didn't hear back, and I'm thinking that might be because it belongs here, in misc. Maybe?