Cage

[dusboss]

There were the times when I believed in world,
the times when I thought I was strong.
I waited for hope to bring my dreams to life,
I waited for a smile to get back home

The river flow I followed,
with the strength of the suns brightest rays,
led me to the imprisonment.
My very own thoughts captured me

Like a wounded animal looking for a shelter,
I was looking for a lost path.
There was no sun to keep me warm,
no life in me to keep me going on

Reminiscing about the nights, dark and bright,
I wondered which one could have made me fly.
In history that I willingly made,
memories are what I blame

[Keith]

You have the bones of something here, however you need to be more concise and focus on the key theme and what it is you want your poem to say. Some of the images you present are vivid but I feel they are wasted as they don't help the reader understand, this could just be me of course. Some of the lines don't make sense for example:-

I believed in world,
The river flow I followed

Have a go at an edit and try to bring out the theme and cut back some of the wordiness.

There were the times when I believed in world
could be
At times I believed in the world

Best Keith

There were the times when I believed in world,
the times when I thought I was strong.
I waited for hope to bring my dreams to life,
I waited for a smile to get back home

The river flow I followed,
with the strength of the suns brightest rays,
led me to the imprisonment.
My very own thoughts captured me

Like a wounded animal looking for a shelter,
I was looking for a lost path.
There was no sun to keep me warm,
no life in me to keep me going on

Reminiscing about the nights, dark and bright,
I wondered which one could have made me fly.
In history that I willingly made,
memories are what I blame

[hankabadpoet]

The first stanza has a wonderfully flowing rhythm to it, perhaps even a force rhyme between the words "strong" and "home". The last three stanzas seem to lack the rhythm the first established, I don't know if this was intentional but to me it seems like it cuts down on the readers ability for immediate comprehension. For instance the second stanza could read as:

The river's flow I followed,
with the strength of the suns brightest rays,
it led me to the imprisonment.
where my thoughts captured me,

Overall I did enjoy it!

Hank...

[Polar Bear]

I agree with hank, and offer an alternate suggestion to the last line of the second stanza in attempt to keep closer to the original rhythm (it's a little ham-fisted, and I disdain 'dad made,' but I hope it illustrates what I'm suggesting):

There were the times when I believed in world,
the times when I thought I was strong.
I waited for hope to bring my dreams to life,
I waited for a smile to get back home

The river flow I followed,
with the strength of the suns brightest rays,
led me to the imprisonment
My very own thoughts had made

The river flow I followed,
with the strength of the suns brightest rays,
led me to the imprisonment.
My very own thoughts captured me

Like a wounded animal looking for a shelter,
I was looking for a lost path.
There was no sun to keep me warm,
no life in me to keep me going on

Reminiscing about the nights, dark and bright,
I wondered which one could have made me fly.
In history that I willingly made,
memories are what I blame

[Simatong]

I take it upon myself not to directly edit another poet's work because I feel that it might be sacrilege to do so (not to imply that the attempts of other forum members to do so should be seen as such; I merely feel unworthy of doing so). I will say that I found the wording a bit disjointed. For instance:
"I believed in world,
The river flow I followed".
It sounds a bit ungrammatical and thus difficult to follow.
Also, I found it a little difficult to follow this line:
"Like a wounded animal looking for a shelter,
I was looking for a lost path."
I couldn't understand if you were saying that while you were looking for a shelter and found a lost path instead, or if you meant that looking for the shelter was a lost cause. While I personally didn't feel the essence of the poem, I do think that there is potential in the wording should you decide to edit it. Thank you for sharing.

[Speaktaboo]

I enjoyed this. Feels like the ground work for a great piece. I suggest you at some layers to it to fill it out. Mask it a bit. Over all good read my friend. Thank you