first finals week in law school

[neskozhu]

I wonder if anyone would get it
If they, the others, understand
The torture that we're going through
Just to come in with an even hand
Its not just the smart ones
Nor even the studious bunch
It's literally every person
That is cognizant of this time of crunch
All hours of the morning
The wee hours of the night
Breakfast all through…breakfast
With time, we're in a fight
The material is overwhelming
Just so much shit to learn
It requires endless hours
The neverending candles burn
Two, three, or more of us
Holed up in a single room
Each preparing tiredlessly
To avoid the approaching doom
If you come there half-ready
Anything less than fucking set
You’re likely to leave the room angry
For your expectation, you’ve not met
So whilst this fate is looming
Back to the screen i go
Back to typing furiously
So come Monday, i shall reap that what I now sow.

[rowens]

It's hard to find anything positive to work with after the first line. I thought you could cut a few lines, but then there were too many to name. This one just isn't working.

You could straighten out some of your lines that are only there to match a rhyming word. Cut some of those lines, and fix the strangling syntax.