(05-07-2017, 07:58 AM)nibbed Wrote: Just wait & watch,
Flip Stick,
the mosquito
starves in the marsh
they say flamingos rest
on one foot to conserve heat
truth be known
it narrows an alligator's target
I guess you don't know the rules. Your first stanza should be the last stanza of the last post. THEN your next stanza uses three words from that, etc etc
Abridged Fauxku Choo Choo guidelines:
1. Any TINY poem of 1 to 4 lines (or a 5 line limerick) - does not have to be haiku-like. 2. Poem includes 2 significant words from the preceding one. (Tense and plurality may be changed, homonyms are allowed.) 3. Poem reflects some aspect of the previous poem (encouraged but not obligatory).
also: 4. Copy last poem and repeat it above your poem in your post. 5. It's OK to play with yourself. (Post replies to you own poem.) 6. If the previous poem doesn't fit the guidelines: Either mention this politely, or continue on as if nothing happened, or use the poem before it, or strike off on your own. (See guideline 3 above.) 7. It's OK to add TINY extraneous (or not) notes. 8. Ray can do whatever he wants as he is the One True God (of FauxkChoo u Ch
(05-07-2017, 07:58 AM)nibbed Wrote: Just wait & watch,
Flip Stick,
the mosquito
starves in the marsh
they say flamingos rest
on one foot to conserve heat
truth be known
it narrows an alligator's target
I guess you don't know the rules. Your first stanza should be the last stanza of the last post. THEN your next stanza uses three words from that, etc etc
Abridged Fauxku Choo Choo guidelines:
1. Any TINY poem of 1 to 4 lines (or a 5 line limerick) - does not have to be haiku-like. 2. Poem includes 2 significant words from the preceding one. (Tense and plurality may be changed, homonyms are allowed.) 3. Poem reflects some aspect of the previous poem (encouraged but not obligatory).
also: 4. Copy last poem and repeat it above your poem in your post. 5. It's OK to play with yourself. (Post replies to you own poem.) 6. If the previous poem doesn't fit the guidelines: Either mention this politely, or continue on as if nothing happened, or use the poem before it, or strike off on your own. (See guideline 3 above.) 7. It's OK to add TINY extraneous (or not) notes. 8. Ray can do whatever he wants as he is the One True God (of FauxkChoo u Ch
oops, yikes. I may have known, at one time.
but forgot.
Sorry. I will try and be even more careful
to reread rules before posting. I thought
I had it...
(05-07-2017, 07:58 AM)nibbed Wrote: Just wait & watch,
Flip Stick,
the mosquito
starves in the marsh
they say flamingos rest
on one foot to conserve heat
truth be known
it narrows an alligator's target
I guess you don't know the rules. Your first stanza should be the last stanza of the last post. THEN your next stanza uses three words from that, etc etc
Abridged Fauxku Choo Choo guidelines:
1. Any TINY poem of 1 to 4 lines (or a 5 line limerick) - does not have to be haiku-like. 2. Poem includes 2 significant words from the preceding one. (Tense and plurality may be changed, homonyms are allowed.) 3. Poem reflects some aspect of the previous poem (encouraged but not obligatory).
also: 4. Copy last poem and repeat it above your poem in your post. 5. It's OK to play with yourself. (Post replies to you own poem.) 6. If the previous poem doesn't fit the guidelines: Either mention this politely, or continue on as if nothing happened, or use the poem before it, or strike off on your own. (See guideline 3 above.) 7. It's OK to add TINY extraneous (or not) notes. 8. Ray can do whatever he wants as he is the One True God (of FauxkChoo u Ch
oops, yikes. I may have known, at one time.
but forgot.
Sorry. I will try and be even more careful
to reread rules before posting. I thought
I had it...
No probs - Leanne picked it up, you're good to go!
flamenco liberals
foxtrot conservatives -
flamingos contemplate
one wing flapping
flapping
headless chicken
liberal stops somewhere
contemplate an end
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McDonald's chicken nuggets
in special Sichuan sauce:
paradise
slow roasted chicken
garden herbs
bird of paradise
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It sits looking
over harbor and city
on silent haunches
and then moves on.
I always thought Sandberg stole that from T S Eliot anyway - from Prufrock
The yellow fog that rubs its back upon the window-panes, The yellow smoke that rubs its muzzle on the window-panes, Licked its tongue into the corners of the evening, Lingered upon the pools that stand in drains, Let fall upon its back the soot that falls from chimneys, Slipped by the terrace, made a sudden leap, And seeing that it was a soft October night, Curled once about the house, and fell asleep.
The fog rolls in on little cat feet,
as i'm frying up a batch of fern fronds.
Out my window sits the harbor...
paradise.
The world rolls along
on the curl of the koru*.
Every window here
opens on paradise.
The world rolls along
on the curl of the koru*.
Every window here
opens on paradise.
fritillaria bells open
over uncurling fern
guardian of cat paradise
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you must pay the toll
to the ferryman, guardian
of the way to Paradise
the toll's been paid -
the bartender grins
while the ferryman
steers towards Paradise
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the toll's been paid -
the bartender grins
while the ferryman
steers towards Paradise
the cat steers towards the tuna salad
on little cat paws
i push the cat out the door with my foot
paradise lost
Eliot / Frost - fog
Prufrock and Fog were published around the same time, so I don't think either one
had an affect on the other. All sorts of quiet things get compared to others.
I bet the Greeks beat Eliot and Frost to it and ancient religious texts beat the Greeks.
a church mouse
quiet as fog
sits looking
over the harbor
on silent haunches
a cat grabs it and eats it
then somewhere
a pin drops
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions