06-14-2012, 02:01 PM
Geoff, Thanks.
Some quick answers
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"...peas in a pod is still cliche"
That's true and not true. It is a cliche, but it is usually applied in a different way.
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should be you're
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"...what false bravery?"
will you not then stand with tightened jaw,
fist balled, and chest outthrust
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"...feels like a verb or something is missing before "used," or maybe it's the tense of the verb"
Punctuation is problematic here, it is missing a colon:
your only purpose: used dirt to form another layer of sand,
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...lot of question words and clauses going on (does...how....when....whether)
Punctuation again probably
Does it matter how long or short the hour, when we eventually succumb to a coward's faint heart, whether slowly or quickly we die?”
It is asking whether it matters how long it takes for them to act as cowards in the face of approaching death, or does it matter how long it takes them to die, whether slowly or quickly. The implication being that it does not matter.
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Dale
I know Billy.
Some quick answers
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"...peas in a pod is still cliche"
That's true and not true. It is a cliche, but it is usually applied in a different way.
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should be you're
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"...what false bravery?"
will you not then stand with tightened jaw,
fist balled, and chest outthrust
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"...feels like a verb or something is missing before "used," or maybe it's the tense of the verb"
Punctuation is problematic here, it is missing a colon:
your only purpose: used dirt to form another layer of sand,
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...lot of question words and clauses going on (does...how....when....whether)
Punctuation again probably
Does it matter how long or short the hour, when we eventually succumb to a coward's faint heart, whether slowly or quickly we die?”
It is asking whether it matters how long it takes for them to act as cowards in the face of approaching death, or does it matter how long it takes them to die, whether slowly or quickly. The implication being that it does not matter.
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Dale
I know Billy.
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.