Memories of Ben

[Indie]

it reads much better, i still stall at the 'his blood drops off' line but that's not a biggie. in general it feels tighter, it still has that personal feel but more so for the reader. i think it's at that stage now where only you can say if it needs any more edits.

I still feel like it needs another edit, maybe more, though I'm glad I've managed to get it to this stage, and that I was able to edit stuff out without agonising too much over it. Thanks for your help.