02-21-2012, 10:40 AM
Nothing to add on the content, has a nice feel though.
Just a quick note on formatting of footnote. Since one cannot superscript, lightening the color helps to set it apart without all the clumsiness of using asterisks.
Roots under moss , tight-tangled and tousled, fixed and firm in the lock of time’s door,
Sip1 soft from the dark sky, where dapper fat grouse, buckshot laden, now cartwheel
Then crash to the lowland, a’wheezing and steaming. They die like Highlanders,
With feathers of tartan,2 dirk-spurred and death-cry, proud breasts cease a’rising.
Proud breasts cease a’rising.
Just a quick note on formatting of footnote. Since one cannot superscript, lightening the color helps to set it apart without all the clumsiness of using asterisks.
Roots under moss , tight-tangled and tousled, fixed and firm in the lock of time’s door,
Sip1 soft from the dark sky, where dapper fat grouse, buckshot laden, now cartwheel
Then crash to the lowland, a’wheezing and steaming. They die like Highlanders,
With feathers of tartan,2 dirk-spurred and death-cry, proud breasts cease a’rising.
Proud breasts cease a’rising.
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.