01-25-2012, 01:15 PM
I have no idea what this is suppose to be, but it does remind me of the temptation of Christ in the Wilderness. There are too many lines that are not clear enough to show why they are there.
Such as
"The boy picked the flower poked through his lapel
by his mother that evening."
Does this mean he has died? It's an interesting line, but I don't see the significance, or how it relates to what precedes or follows. I get the offer I suppose, but I have no idea what the situation is. For me he poem does not have the impact it could because too much is left out. It's like, "Well, this is an interesting thesis, but there is nothing that allows me to connect to the poem in anyway, that would cause me to care."
Dale
Such as
"The boy picked the flower poked through his lapel
by his mother that evening."
Does this mean he has died? It's an interesting line, but I don't see the significance, or how it relates to what precedes or follows. I get the offer I suppose, but I have no idea what the situation is. For me he poem does not have the impact it could because too much is left out. It's like, "Well, this is an interesting thesis, but there is nothing that allows me to connect to the poem in anyway, that would cause me to care."
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.