Queen

[Wildcard]

Hi Addy,
This one was posted way before I got here, but since everyone else is bumping I'll do the same

Sticky lips
smearing dye
stick needles
through a spindled eye
Sits splendid as
He sips his tea
All too important
Not to speak

--The first part seems like it's trying to have a definite rhythm and rhyme scheme, but just needs tweaking. The second seems to abandon both- I think it might be best if you a) loosen up the first part and make the rhymes internal (or take them away altogether OR b) make the second stanza conform jmo

And wonders
how she misses
when callouses
cared enough to hurt;
Smiles near perfect
as she hides the sound of mice
under the heel of her
one glass shoe

To reiterate: Because of how the first stanza flows and rhymes, when I read 'cared enough to hurt;' I'm all built up to end on 'skirt' or something that rhymes. When it doesn't happen I feel like I'm missing something. (You know I'm new at this so if I'm all wrong just ignore me.)

Now on content:

'All too important
Not to speak'

I'm puzzling over this. I would get 'too important to speak', but I'm not sure I know where you're going with 'too important not to speak' . . . Maybe you mean too self-important to remain silent because the world needs to hear the wisdom (or some other egotistical impression), but that doesn't seem to fit either.

On Perception:

Seems like Cinderella got the prince, but now she is sick of his shit? (Probably way off, but the one glass shoe makes me think of that story and the 'And wonders
how she misses
when callouses
cared enough to hurt;' part makes me think she maybe she misses hard work (and the little Disney animal friends :p) because at least it was honest.

Anyway, that's my take. Thanks for sharing. (sorry if I'm way off)