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(12-18-2009, 08:57 PM)srijantje Wrote:  Hummingbird
Writing on air
Gone
i think don't think gone is needed. the first two lines work great as they are.
unless you could make an image of the word gone.
those two lines could be a good place to do a larger poem.
i like it.
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bird - by srijantje - 12-18-2009, 08:57 PM
RE: bird - by billy - 12-18-2009, 09:08 PM
RE: bird - by srijantje - 12-18-2009, 09:14 PM
RE: bird - by billy - 12-18-2009, 09:51 PM



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