07-23-2011, 07:19 AM
I do not like to see poems without comments, but I am afraid I do not follow you, ckeo.
Asunder as I understand it is an adjective or adverb and here you seem to be using it as a noun. In L2 'rosen blue' - I know there are blue roses, but a rosy blue makes no sense to me. I apologize for not being more helpful.
Asunder as I understand it is an adjective or adverb and here you seem to be using it as a noun. In L2 'rosen blue' - I know there are blue roses, but a rosy blue makes no sense to me. I apologize for not being more helpful.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?