07-22-2011, 08:48 AM
Nice edit Todd. I do like the symbolic use of poppy. 
I cannot emphasize how awesome your choice of POV is... the serene beauty it speaks of hiding undertones of cold paranoia. You've captured an interesting narrative angle very well
I cannot emphasize how awesome your choice of POV is... the serene beauty it speaks of hiding undertones of cold paranoia. You've captured an interesting narrative angle very well
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?