04-26-2011, 05:10 PM
I don't like this poem if I'm honest with you. It feels cheap and dishonest. The dust bowl and the flowers are supposed to be a metaphor for the narrator's chastity, how after being dry for so long they're finally experiencing passion. That's why they haven't seen the plants at the end. I find it interesting you like the image of the lovers but struggle with the rest. I might re-write this without the similes and metaphors.
Thanks for the feedback Billy.
Thanks for the feedback Billy.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe