Sleepless

[Todd]

Hi Mrs-Sin,

It's good to see your work again. I'll post a few comments for you in the lines (my opinion of course as always use what you like and ignore the rest):

It’s been said far too many times--Might just be a preference but given the title I don't know if you need this line
The teddy isn’t comforting enough
The blankets are cold--great line. Option for you would be to emphasize the parallel structure more and change "are" to "too". Just an option though
The bed too large
(it’s downsized and yet there’s still too much space)--not sure you need this line

I say everything too much because--can you think of a more visual way to say this
I’m afraid
You’ll forget them if I pause
Long enough to breathe

I’m tossing and turning--a little too comon of a phrase here I don't think you need it
Restless in the grip of
Nightmares that mock me with your face
And your name on my lips as I’m released from
Hel--maybe a minor typo Hell (unless you mean the Norse goddess which I think you do)
And all her promises of half-dead romance--I like half-dead romance

I say things too much because
I’m scared
I’ll forget how to express
Everything

It’s been said far too many times
You make the bad things go away
The nights are perfect
The time endless
(if only I could stop it when we needed to… all the time)--I would like to see more images in these last two strophes

I say things too much because
I don’t know
How to say them
‘Just enough’

Time and distance are one and the same --nice line
And you’re far too long away from me
For anything to be comfortable in this--don't think you need in this
Un-dead dream that--do you really need the hyphen? Also the line break might be better if you pull "threatens" up.
Threatens my reality

(did you know you keep me real?)

Some good stuff here that can be developed. I hope the comments will be helpful to you.

Best,

Todd