Daisies on a Hill

[Bianca Alabaster]

thank you guys for your advice. I guess it seems a little disjointed or not smoothe but I don't agree that it should start with Grandma. The daisies have been in my head for days, a symbol of peace and hope and having a positive attitude, as well as great imagery. I wanted the poem to have a shock, abruptness or sudden jarring; that is why I used the word and stanza, "recoil like a shotgun" because all of a sudden the heart attacks became a sinister enemy after my grandma. they weren't smoothe for my family or my psyche so I didn't want them smoothe in the poem. And bringing her the daisies could be literal but it was symbolic of bringing her the hope and desire to live. She is 93. It may seem better that it should be two poems, but it was never that in my mind - quite the opposite I had conflicting thoughts of peace and pain comingled. Guess I didn't do a good job with the pen. Appreciate your comments.