Spider Spirit- edit2

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Spider Spirit


tiny spider crossed
deeply-patterned rug
negotiating each plateau
without anticipating
its next obstacle:

had it learned that system when
insect-striving gained rug’s end
flat tiles extending
out of touch, unending
freedom like an angel’s way?

edit1;

tiny spider crossed
deeply-patterned rug
negotiating each plateau
without anticipating
its next obstacle–

had it learned that system when
insect-striving gained rug’s end
flat tiles extending
out of touch unending
freedom like an angel’s way?

original version;

Watched a tiny spider cross
a deeply-sculpted patterned rug
negotiating each plateau
and ridge without anticipation
of its next upcoming valley

though it may have learned that system
by the time its striving brought it
to rug’s end, flat tile extending
out of touch and sight unending
freedom like an angel’s way.

The part from 'flat tile.....angel's way' comes as a surprise, almost an epiphany.
When I first read it, I thought that the unending freedom came to the spider at the end (which I think is a better image), but on subsequent reading it appears that it was a previous experience of that freedom which made the spider unprepared to meet its next obstacle.
Both tell stories, each different.