11-23-2018, 11:41 PM
Hey billy,
Appreciate your feedback all the same. I'm going to work on the last stanza. You said it was a little wordy in some places; I'm going to remove the "and then" but is there any other places you were referring to when you made this comment?
As for the comment on the first line, if I put the semicolon at the end then I'd be making that like somewhat of a sentence. If it was a sentence, it would be a redundant one because of how it would mention weeping tears. Same thing goes for placing the comma at the end, only I'd have no idea what lines 2-3 would mean as their own clause. Right now, I have it as a complex sentence.
All the best,
Alex
Appreciate your feedback all the same. I'm going to work on the last stanza. You said it was a little wordy in some places; I'm going to remove the "and then" but is there any other places you were referring to when you made this comment?
As for the comment on the first line, if I put the semicolon at the end then I'd be making that like somewhat of a sentence. If it was a sentence, it would be a redundant one because of how it would mention weeping tears. Same thing goes for placing the comma at the end, only I'd have no idea what lines 2-3 would mean as their own clause. Right now, I have it as a complex sentence.
All the best,
Alex