In The Grave

[nibbed]

In The Grave                               Here I am placing myself in a casket, at least looking into one that is in the ground, observing.


A drop of blood,                           from whence did the blood appear and why?
Scarlet red.                                  scarlet may hint scarlet letter, scarlet fever, scarlet o'hara,  an artist tube, or scar(hurt) let (allowed)
Upon a rose,                                rose, someone who was lifted? a person's name or a flower placed in the grave.
It then bled.                                 The rose had artificial coloring, dye, hurt, or some reason why it "bled"?                 

Weeping through silk,                  this is where it gets visual for me
Of fleece white.                             coffin lining in white
Blending smoothly,
With all it's might.                         its

Turning first pink,                         I'd eliminate the comma and carry it thru to the next line
Supple and sweet.
Then concaving further,
Fathomless red it meets.               Here I get a little lost

A plummeting descent,                 the rose's bleeding
To flounders floors.                       does this need an apostrophe? Is flounders a noun or verb? A noun makes little sense. Flat?
Where it then rests/sleeps/slumbers, (not sure which one)      no then, perhaps use a two syllable word
Forevermore. 

A single petal,
Upon rows of gore.                        I see ribs, rows
Lying impaired,                              
Forevermore.                                 I wonder the raven's behavior, nesting practices, I see black with purple sheen
                                                      a beautiful creature I remember from memory, wise and clever from youth

Hi poetkitten

The poem does need a bit more clarity, but the rhyme with improvement shows it is heading in the right direction.
You certainly bravely ventured where few choose to go. Thank you for sharing and an opportunity to read your work.

-nibbed