02-14-2018, 05:37 AM
I love the visuals this one gives me. Very raw. Very intense. There were a couple of times that I wasn't sure if you were transitioning to a rhyming scheme or not, for example:
no more affection,
lust or infections.
Perhaps you alter one of these words to improve the flow. Unless of course, you were going for the rhyme.
no more affection,
lust or infections.
Perhaps you alter one of these words to improve the flow. Unless of course, you were going for the rhyme.