Succession (Edit 1)
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(05-23-2017, 08:50 PM)thegaslights Wrote:  
(05-23-2017, 08:11 PM)billy Wrote:  without the info, i thought it was the mountain coming back to life. i found the poem hard to get to grips with. too hard to be able to do a full and warranted piece of feedback on. it feels original, i feel i should be able to grasp it but i'm really struggling. for me it needs to be tied togther with a few more clear images. hopefully someone else can give you better feedback. welcome to the site.
Thanks Billy. I threw in a minor edit - not sure if I should mark it as edited? I'm going to continue to think on how I can make it more clear.
normally we keep the original and post the edit above it;marking it which ever edit it is
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Succession (Edit 1) - by thegaslights - 05-23-2017, 11:57 AM
RE: Succession - by billy - 05-23-2017, 08:11 PM
RE: Succession - by thegaslights - 05-23-2017, 08:50 PM
RE: Succession - by billy - 05-23-2017, 09:35 PM
RE: Succession - by Todd - 05-24-2017, 12:52 AM
RE: Succession - by ellajam - 05-24-2017, 01:17 AM
RE: Succession - by billy - 05-24-2017, 07:11 AM
RE: Succession - by vagabond - 05-24-2017, 08:17 AM
RE: Succession - by thegaslights - 05-25-2017, 06:02 AM



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