02-11-2017, 02:17 PM
(02-17-2016, 03:04 PM)Achebe Wrote: When a song must be sungConfused by the rhyme scheme. Sung doesn't have a pair unless it's ring or drummed, then rooftops and drops pair....does rain pair with unsaid? It doesn't, the way I would say them. But, taking, making, quaking are so straightforward in their rhyme, it makes the ones that don't have a clear match really stand out.
it shall ring from the rooftops -- cliche?
drummed by the hoof drops
of rising rain.
Though money's for the taking
on deals in the making
your lips will be quaking
from words unsaid.