01-29-2017, 07:58 AM
Fair call. I'll look at them closely.
I occasionally (more than occasionally) run across people who have a prejudice against rhyme and structure altogether, and basically demand a different poem. I call them many names -- under my breath of course, because this isn't the place to call out morons
I was working on assonance more than true rhyme and I'm happy to run with that so long as it keeps the meter intact. The chant is important to me as I really want to keep the feeling of an oral narration. Not far from where I grew up there is a suburb called Windradyne, and barely anyone knows why. There is a disconnect between black and white history, and I'm not Indigenous so I don't feel I have the right to appropriate their feelings in this matter. It's a difficult thing for me to write, as I know for sure that my ancestors had Aboriginal blood on their hands: Wiradjuri, Eora, Yuin and Ngarigo. Perhaps I don't, in the end, have the right to try.
I occasionally (more than occasionally) run across people who have a prejudice against rhyme and structure altogether, and basically demand a different poem. I call them many names -- under my breath of course, because this isn't the place to call out morons
I was working on assonance more than true rhyme and I'm happy to run with that so long as it keeps the meter intact. The chant is important to me as I really want to keep the feeling of an oral narration. Not far from where I grew up there is a suburb called Windradyne, and barely anyone knows why. There is a disconnect between black and white history, and I'm not Indigenous so I don't feel I have the right to appropriate their feelings in this matter. It's a difficult thing for me to write, as I know for sure that my ancestors had Aboriginal blood on their hands: Wiradjuri, Eora, Yuin and Ngarigo. Perhaps I don't, in the end, have the right to try.
It could be worse