Corridor [edit]

[Quixilated]

Hello Duke,

I adore unexpected rainbows.    Only two comments:

Corridor

 
 
One morning, sidewalk-biking up a hill
sun at my five o’clock, there rose
some distance on, a water-hazard:
pop-up sprinklers on each side
dousing grass and walk.
 
Yet closer-to, it seemed these drenching sprays
were regulated so one could pass through
with only wetted feet.  So I advanced  The two "only"s so close together bothered me.  Perhaps this one could be "merely" or other synonym?
 
only to find false seeming: in between
these heavy sprays a droplet mist reposed
into which I fared
 
and found each fan of droplets reached
became a glory - rainbows right and left
rejoiced the eye, each lovely as the next
all unexpected, corridor of color
bracing blaze of clear, emprismed light.
 
(If you miss the moral of this tale
your thinking may just need a wash
sun at your five o’clock
in halls of rainbow veil.)
 

Should the summary stanza remain, and is that made-up word appropriate?

And then to answer your "spoiler" question, I ... couldn't find the made-up word.   Also, I didn't mind the moral at the end, but also wouldn't miss it. But if you decide to take it off, I would miss "halls of rainbow veil."  So I was thinking, if you don't keep that last stanza for some reason, you could replace "rainbows right and left" with "halls of rainbow veil" so as not to lose that image.    


Anyway, that's really the only comments I had.  I love this piece.  

-Quix