The Autocrat

[Ton Romus]

This is a pretty tight vignette.

IMO this kind of piece is all about ordinary "facts" juxtaposed by
surprising details (imagery) or unexpected counterpoints.

As presented this reads as a rather linear description which seems
more like reporting than story telling. But that's probably my
personal preference for asymmetry and non-linearity kicking in.

That said, I believe you could look for more sensory stimulation
by keeping sight smell hearing taste and touch in mind.

I'd also be curious to know where "mom" is in this equation.

Are you willing to reveal some of the dark shadows that every home has?

Just some thoughts.

But I want to underscore the fact I enjoyed the read!

~Ton