09-14-2016, 04:35 AM
dj, I am going to run trail on only the first verse, what is true of the first verse is true of the rest of the piece in tone & presentation & heart, if nothing else.
This invocation begins with a transformation, the first of four, 3 in the first verse, one in the second - the sapling is not a sapling but "I'm a sapling" - "with deep roots" - the poet admits he is "half grown" & "half aware" and the deep roots go deeper as the poet now transforms into a "shiny gun", an image packed with baggage which the poet dispels with the words, "that won't shoot", the gun is harmless but not devoid of nor incapable of action. Which brings us to our third transformation - "I'm a feather in the air", we have gone from the young tree & the roots of same, by way of the gun, to the avian realm, all in the first verse and all in 24 words - not shabby at all, dj, indeed, an act of power - the feather is not fallen on the ground but "in the air", above things, and subject no longer to roots & place but to the wind - the poet has now given sign for the reader to follow where he or she will as they travel the rest of the writing -
Enjoyed dj - Thx
This invocation begins with a transformation, the first of four, 3 in the first verse, one in the second - the sapling is not a sapling but "I'm a sapling" - "with deep roots" - the poet admits he is "half grown" & "half aware" and the deep roots go deeper as the poet now transforms into a "shiny gun", an image packed with baggage which the poet dispels with the words, "that won't shoot", the gun is harmless but not devoid of nor incapable of action. Which brings us to our third transformation - "I'm a feather in the air", we have gone from the young tree & the roots of same, by way of the gun, to the avian realm, all in the first verse and all in 24 words - not shabby at all, dj, indeed, an act of power - the feather is not fallen on the ground but "in the air", above things, and subject no longer to roots & place but to the wind - the poet has now given sign for the reader to follow where he or she will as they travel the rest of the writing -
Enjoyed dj - Thx