08-27-2016, 06:37 AM
(08-27-2016, 03:02 AM)Alic Elliot Wrote: Sitting at homeHello Alic. You said that you'd started writing a few months ago. This is not bad for someone who's just starting out. Yes, if you don't do your homework you could end up bagging groceries for a living, so do it and become a banker.
Feeling alone
Homework piled high
I stare at it and sigh
Heightened expectations
Crippling limitations
I have to do well
Or end up in a living hell
And a job I hate
Doomed to my fate
I set my bar higher than I can reach
“You can do it"- Time to practice what I preach
No mistakes
Limited breaks
Have to work faster
Push myself harder
To meet expectations
There's no exceptions
Since you're just starting out, it's good for you to try and write to an established form, such as a sonnet. it imposes a certain discipline in rhyme and meter. As you can guess, your current poem is not interesting for a general reader, content - wise, it's just a plain old lament. What is good is that you've tried to follow a rhyming scheme, however basic.
Good luck.