Expectations [Edit 1]
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(08-27-2016, 03:02 AM)Alic Elliot Wrote:  Sitting at home
Feeling alone
Homework piled high
I stare at it and sigh
Heightened expectations
Crippling limitations
I have to do well
Or end up in a living hell
And a job I hate
Doomed to my fate
I set my bar higher than I can reach
“You can do it"- Time to practice what I preach
No mistakes 
Limited breaks
Have to work faster
Push myself harder
To meet expectations
There's no exceptions
Hello Alic. You said that you'd started writing a few months ago. This is not bad  for someone who's just starting out. Yes, if you don't do your homework you could end up bagging groceries for a living, so do it and become a banker.
Since you're just starting out, it's good for you to try and write to an established form, such as a sonnet. it imposes a certain discipline in rhyme and meter. As you can guess, your current poem is not interesting for a general reader, content - wise, it's just a plain old lament. What is good is that you've tried to follow a rhyming scheme, however basic.
Good luck.
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Messages In This Thread
Expectations [Edit 1] - by Alic Elliot - 08-27-2016, 03:02 AM
RE: Expectations - by rowens - 08-27-2016, 04:41 AM
RE: Expectations - by stampede331 - 08-27-2016, 06:01 AM
RE: Expectations - by Achebe - 08-27-2016, 06:37 AM
RE: Expectations - by Lizzie - 08-27-2016, 07:03 PM
RE: Expectations - by CRNDLSM - 09-02-2016, 05:18 AM
RE: Expectations [Edit 1] - by Alic Elliot - 09-05-2016, 04:52 AM
RE: Expectations [Edit 1] - by rowens - 09-06-2016, 03:59 AM
RE: Expectations [Edit 1] - by Vox_Nihilis - 09-11-2016, 02:40 PM



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