03-30-2016, 02:43 AM
Open the door and let the breeze through
I beg of you, I beg of you
For the room is small and the air is warm
And you’re deep inside and you’ve closed the door
So open it I beg of you,
And let a fresh breeze through.
Don’t picture it but look outside,
I beg of you, I beg of you,
For there's are no storms, and the day is mild
And the fields are fresh where the grass grows wild
Let the atmosphere wash over you, (better "Let fresh air wash over you")
And let a soft breeze through.
You’ve been inside for far too long
I beg of you, I beg of you,
You sat and faced a painted wall
Thought you that you could see it all -You thought that you could see it all- syntax
But things have changed as they always do
So let the new breeze through.
But wanted I to change you too- I wanted to change you too _ syntax
And to this end I painted you
I fancied you would come and see
But you stayed inside and you painted me
And but painted pictures blow away
When you let a true breeze through.
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Nice subtext
"The times, they are a changing" - Bob Dylan
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As a service to your reader(s), please do not cap the start of every line. That was originally a necessity related to typesetting. Capping the lines in print went out in the 1950's, primarily because it was no longer a need in typesetting, and it was less confusing to the reader. Most people coming up through the school system tend to read poetry either in text books or in anthologies. The compilers of these texts prefer not to use copyrighted material, which leaves more of the older material that is typeset in the old way, giving the impression that is how it should be done which is an unfortunate misapprehension.
To cap the start of each line today is less a stylistic choice rather than an affectation, in that it serves no purpose in terms of the text and in fact makes the text more difficult to read.
Best,
dale
I beg of you, I beg of you
For the room is small and the air is warm
And you’re deep inside and you’ve closed the door
So open it I beg of you,
And let a fresh breeze through.
Don’t picture it but look outside,
I beg of you, I beg of you,
For there's are no storms, and the day is mild
And the fields are fresh where the grass grows wild
Let the atmosphere wash over you, (better "Let fresh air wash over you")
And let a soft breeze through.
You’ve been inside for far too long
I beg of you, I beg of you,
You sat and faced a painted wall
Thought you that you could see it all -You thought that you could see it all- syntax
But things have changed as they always do
So let the new breeze through.
But wanted I to change you too- I wanted to change you too _ syntax
And to this end I painted you
I fancied you would come and see
But you stayed inside and you painted me
And but painted pictures blow away
When you let a true breeze through.
__________________________________________________________________
Nice subtext
"The times, they are a changing" - Bob Dylan
_____________________________________________________________________
As a service to your reader(s), please do not cap the start of every line. That was originally a necessity related to typesetting. Capping the lines in print went out in the 1950's, primarily because it was no longer a need in typesetting, and it was less confusing to the reader. Most people coming up through the school system tend to read poetry either in text books or in anthologies. The compilers of these texts prefer not to use copyrighted material, which leaves more of the older material that is typeset in the old way, giving the impression that is how it should be done which is an unfortunate misapprehension.
To cap the start of each line today is less a stylistic choice rather than an affectation, in that it serves no purpose in terms of the text and in fact makes the text more difficult to read.
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.