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The Breeze
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03-16-2016, 07:23 PM
Overall, a very nice piece with some wonderful lines, my favourite being "And the fields are fresh where the grass grows wild". I really didn't like the repitition of the 'I beg of you'. It worked the first time but then began to grate.I didn't understand the reason to use 'But wanted I' instead of 'But I wanted but I am new here :-)
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The Breeze - by jameso - 03-12-2016, 11:54 AM
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RE: The Breeze - by jameso - 03-13-2016, 07:15 AM
RE: The Breeze - by ellajam - 03-15-2016, 08:47 AM
RE: The Breeze - by Winter.Rain - 03-16-2016, 11:18 AM
RE: The Breeze - by billy - 03-16-2016, 05:33 PM
RE: The Breeze - by DC Black - 03-16-2016, 07:23 PM
RE: The Breeze - by jameso - 03-18-2016, 03:07 PM
RE: The Breeze - by The Raven - 03-20-2016, 10:41 AM
RE: The Breeze - by Beyond all Lines - 03-29-2016, 11:20 PM
RE: The Breeze - by Erthona - 03-30-2016, 02:43 AM
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