The Breeze

[DerTomatenToaster]

The Breeze

Open the door and let the breeze through
I beg of you, I beg of you
For the room is small and the air is warm
And you’re deep inside and you’ve closed the door [I'd end the sentence here]
So open it I beg of you,
And let a fresh breeze through.


Don’t picture it but look outside,
I beg of you, I beg of you,
For there are no storms and the day is mild
And the fields are fresh where the grass grows wild [Same here]
Let the atmosphere wash over you,
And let a soft breeze through.


You’ve been inside for far too long
I beg of you, I beg of you,
You sat and faced a painted wall
Thought you that you could see it all ["Thought you that you" sounds really weird, comma]
But things have changed as they always do
So let the new breeze through.


But wanted I to change you too [Don't know why you suddenly start with the weird word order, doesn't really fit the rest]
And to this end I painted you [End the sentence]
I fancied you would come and see
But you stayed inside and you painted me [Would leave out the second "you"]
And painted pictures blow away
When you let a true breeze through.

I really liked the picture you drew in my head(pun intended) and the general idea behind it of changing yourself and others. Most of the rhymes were pretty good (even if not extraordinary) aswell, none of them sounded forced, because of which you also left out rhymes at some points, which I like a lot.
As you can see above, my biggest complaints are about your punctuation. It was really weird at some points, because you only used dots at the end of a verse. I also didn't really like that you started every line with a capital letter, was kind of confusing from time to time, but that's just my personal preference.
(I don't really have much of an idea of poetry, so you should probably wait for someone else's reply, but those are just my honest thoughts)