Redshirts (Revision)

[Akira]

Good fun.

We chose security over science,
and draped in blood die bloodless    this didn't bother me, but commas could clarify
under the not-blue 
sky. We are dowsing rods             Not saying you should, but I wondered when I read about connecting these/cutting out the "We are", so not-blue sky, dowsing rods to .....
to child gods and rogue androids.
There is a light that blossoms
orange within our chests,
till we are cinders
within this sack of sparks,
                                          I usually like breaks, not sure if this one accomplishes much
only ever last names.           This is most likely personal preference, but perhaps ever only instead of the only ever