Swamp and Batter

[Moonstruck1]

Draft 2

Through marsh, through swamp,
It does not matter,
Though dark disdain,
It's her I'll flatter.
Such strength my want,
So trite this matter,
It will remain,
So long I stand her.


But Love,
It's not what I'd rather.
So sweet, so sticky,
Like brownie batter.
I'll make a point,
Though it may be tough,
It's great, but,
Much too dense- this stuff.

Hello. I enjoyed this poem. After reading it, I feel like it's talking about how love can be tough to deal with yet wondeful too, but I might be wrong too...

In the first part, did you mean to put "through" again, or is it "though"? It probably doesn't matter, just curious.
The last line in the first stanza, "so long I stand her." doesn't make sense to me. English is not my first language, but I know what "stand" means. I always took it in this context as "endure", but in this sense it sounds like you are enduring her. Maybe that's what you meant in the first place??

I guess I don't really understand the overall message here. But that shouldn't bother you, I tend to have trouble understanding these kind of things...
I enjoyed the rhymes too. Some of it seemed forced, like in the second part with "rather" and "batter". The word order "is not what I'd rather." makes sense, but was clearly forced to find a word to rhyme with batter. I'm not sure if that's a bad thing, however.

Thanks for sharing! Look forward to more.