Swamp and Batter

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Life in a Love
Robert Browning, 1812 - 1889

Escape me?
Never—
Beloved!
While I am I, and you are you,
  So long as the world contains us both,
  Me the loving and you the loth,
While the one eludes, must the other pursue.
My life is a fault at last, I fear:
  It seems too much like a fate, indeed!
  Though I do my best I shall scarce succeed.
But what if I fail of my purpose here?
It is but to keep the nerves at strain,
  To dry one’s eyes and laugh at a fall,
And baffled, get up to begin again,—
  So the chase takes up one’s life, that’s all.
While, look but once from your farthest bound,
  At me so deep in the dust and dark,
No sooner the old hope drops to ground
  Than a new one, straight to the selfsame mark,
I shape me—
Ever
Removed!

Pretty creepy. Stalker.  

Through Marsh, through swamp, I don't get why Marsh is capitalized.
It does not matter,
Though dark disdain,
It's her I'll flatter. I like the use of the word flatter here.
Such strength my want,
So slight my clamor, Slight clamor is a bit odd, I don't know if I like it or hate it.
It will remain,
So long I stand her.

But Love,
It's not what I'd rather.
So sweet, so sticky,
Like brownie batter. A fun three lines.
I'll make a point,
Though it may be tough,
It's great, but,
Much too dense- this stuff.

The urge to urge.
Browning's "Life in a Love".
My nerves on nerves.
I'm sure -- I've done enough. Awkward last line.

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Hey guys! This is my first post. Hopefully I've done everything alright so far... I have really enjoyed this site so far and look forward to becoming more of a member on this forum. Moreover, I'm considering scrapping the last stanza in this one as the rhythm really does not sit well with the rest of the poem. Any thoughts on that specifically would be appreciated (in addition to whatever else you see).Thanks for checking this out! 

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