Swamp and Batter

Swamp and Batter

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Andy Kaufman

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11-04-2015, 10:23 AM

You have some interesting rhymes. Overall, the poem doesn't seem very controlled, just thoughts that meet the rhyme as it goes. You could pull some of those rhymes off if there was more strength concentrated into what's being said.

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Swamp and Batter - by thepoorfortune - 11-04-2015, 07:36 AM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by rowens - 11-04-2015, 10:23 AM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by thepoorfortune - 11-04-2015, 12:33 PM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by ellajam - 11-04-2015, 11:07 PM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by poemkeats2016 - 11-05-2015, 03:27 PM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by Terse - 11-05-2015, 07:17 PM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by the man with the spoon - 11-06-2015, 06:08 AM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by thepoorfortune - 11-13-2015, 05:06 AM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by Moonstruck1 - 11-18-2015, 05:26 AM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by samyarb - 12-05-2015, 07:30 AM

RE: Swamp and Batter - by reverentpain - 12-05-2015, 11:09 AM

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