The One I Never Slept With

[billy]

hi Emm.

i think the first part works well; though not too much of the enjambment, i've seen the bad-good boy comments and i'm on the fence with it.
while it works for me it would still work without it. the latter section of the poem needs a bit more depth and a few words less.

The One I Never Slept With

The bad-good boy smelling of some sweet
cologne – a hint of vanilla and a tang
that hung in the air when you passed
by. I close my eyes and I'm back the enjambment doesn't work for me if feels convoluted
in the musty new bookstore
where the clerk asked if you should
pay for my journals.
It could have been the way
we had matching conference totes or
tattoos on our arms or
that we spoke
of Robert Bly and
Sharon Olds and
how
I-am-going-to-spend-way-too-much-money-on-this-trip.

It's not your writing I fell for.


What if he knows
I still think of
your sweet smell
your firm arms
that when I
am floating float
above
myself
with him
that I
just
lust
for
you