02-18-2015, 06:39 AM
Hello Mongolfiere,
Your poem is beautiful, thank you for submitting it.
I will say that I felt it was unnecessarily long, I think it would have more impact if you were to pull out some of the less important details and present it in a shortened version.
Take care,
John
Your poem is beautiful, thank you for submitting it.
I will say that I felt it was unnecessarily long, I think it would have more impact if you were to pull out some of the less important details and present it in a shortened version.
Take care,
John