Ghost [Warning: Explicit]

[ellajam]

Thank you both so much for the feedback! You've left me with a lot to think about and I look forward to reworking this piece.

Me too . When you post your next version just put it above your original so that it's the first thing newcomers to the thread read.

Remember, the more critique you give the more carefully you'll read and the more you'll be able to see what works and what doesn't in your own work.

Have fun